When you need to write to impress.. You can go overboard.. Meaning no offense to anyone here..!!
"Inquisitive, versatile, adaptable, lively, intelligent, spontaneous, communicative, patient, and talkative, witty and busy, and might impress people with my eloquence." (Are you DONE talking?)
"Librans are among the most civilized and are often good looking." ('Often' is the keyword here)
"my nephew and myself are interested in your profile." (WHAT?)
"Someone who is willing to be a friend and maybe a life partner at some point." (Oh, you are on the wrong website)
"This is not a competition or a reality show that I need to prove why you should choose me amongst millions of profiles in this website. You will choose me if 'he' wants us to be together." (Isn't it 'He'?)
"Body Type: Slim" (I can SEE you are anything but slim!! And lets not even start with complexion!!)
"Sorry for your incognizance." (Huh?)
"Im looking for a nice educated woman to enjoy life with. In between the ages of 30 and 40 or somewhere within that range. " (Oops, you need to wait a few years)
